What Ending Should I Use for My Story?

Question by the girl that started it all: What ending should I use for my story?
sorry if this gets a little long…
okay, for school we have to write a short story, that we can just completely make up. i had an idea last night, and turned it into about seven and a half pages. heres the basic plot, as of now:
a girl, niki, meets a boy, aiden, at the start of the summer. they become friends quickly. one day when they’re talking, they make a list, for fun, of things they’re never done. (the story is called, “i’ve never”). soon after, aiden finds out he has to move at the end of the summer. they decide to do all the things on the list they made before he has to leave. (btw, important detail: they both wrote “i’ve never fallen in love”.) so they accomplish everything on the list, and at the end the only thing left is fall in love and they admit to each other that they are in love.
but my friends read it and said it was predictable. so i came up with an alternate ending and sub-plot.
them meeting and all stays the same, only aiden has a step dad who is abusive. they still make the list, only WITHOUT the “fall in love” part. one of the things on the list, though, (it was on the original too, i just decided to use it as more of a plot device) is “go to seattle.” aiden still finds out he has to leave, and they still do all the things on the list. only throughout the summer the abuse gets worse. so the last thing on the list is “go to seattle” and they decide to go there and stay so that aiden can finally escape his step dad. (they’re supposed to be 17 at this point). they eventually get married and aiden becomes a successful musician. (one of the things on the original list was “write a song” and i decided to use that more too.). niki writes and publishes poetry (she’s sorta based off me), and they’re happy. yay.
i know neither of them are perfect or even very good, but of the two versions which is better?
thanks if you bothered to read all this.
btw, if you have an alternate ending, i’d love to hear it! anything better than these, as i’m happy with the concept but not really the direction it headed in.
to kennick…
i like your idea and if i were writing this just for me i would use it, and may use it in another story or in this story in a seperate version. but this is for school, and even the abusive thing is pushing it a little, especially considering my age. (i’m 14).

Best answer:

Answer by cappy
the idea is good. and the ending i think is a little cheesy and used a lot(the whole happily ever after theme). but that may just be because i didn’t read the whole story.

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